gocubsgo2 wrote:
COLOURLESS HAIKU LIZARD RAY WHEEL SUPER BAGEL
AUTHOR: TubaDude49
DIFFICULTY: [Medium]
CATEGORY: Platformer
POSITIVES: The title was strange, seemingly a mishmash of unrelated words, but it caught my attention, that's for sure.
NEGATIVES:
-There is unstickered dissolve material at the beginning of the level, and indeed throughout it. It is considered unprofessional by the community at large to have unstickered/un-covered-up dissolve in a level. I suggest stickering/decorating it.
-There is dark matter visible by the mouth of the lizard. It is considered unprofessional by the community at large to have visible dark matter. I suggest hiding it out of sight.
-The level seemed very random, with no unifying theme or concept. This can be a positive in some cases, but it was simply TOO random, in my opinion, with no obvious or discernible theme.
-After the rocket-vehicle section, the whole platform/area is built out of dark matter and nothing else. It's unprofessional to have any visible dark matter, as said above. Also, there were no stickers, decorations, or visual enchancements of any kind. I suggest spending a lot more time on this section, improving it, putting much more effort forth.
-I saw The Collector, made by Media Molecule themselves, in the abovementioned dark matter section. It's considered, well, lazy to have Mm-made objects in a level. I suggest replacing The Collector with a new, custom-made villain/character.
-I saw the butler-type enemy from the Wedding levels, made by Mm. For the same reason as replacing the Collector, I suggest you replace this character as well.
-The giant wheel was confusing. I definitely do not suggest using glass for the platforms, set against the background that is there now. I couldn't see where I was jumping most of the time.
-The giant wheel moved too fast to be able to get out of it in a reasonably short amount of time. I suggest slowing the wheel down and testing and checking to see what speed is just right.
-At the checkpoint after exiting the wheel, there is no jetpack. If the player somehow lost his/her jetpack, it would be impossible to finish the level. Place a jetpack at that checkpoint.
-A short ways after the aforementioned checkpoint, there is a visible player proximity switch. Make it invisible.
-At the boss battle, there were numerous things wrong. First, the camera angle did not show the boss, so it was really luck to hit the boss at all. Second, the boss was a simple Mm-made object; make it your own! Make it custom! Third, the whole setting was built out of dark matter. This is a large "no-no."
-The visuals were subpar. I found little eye candy. They don't have to be spectacular, only adequate. However, they were not.
NITPICKS:
-Look at the level description. I saw a few grammar errors in the last two sentences. It's unprofessional to not have good grammar and spelling in a level. I suggest fixing it.
SUGGESTIONS:
-Look into, consider, or implement the negatives and nitpick.
NOTES: I always try to be objective in my reviews, and I believe I have in this. My rating is my honest, objective opinion of the level.
OVERALL RATING: 1/5 stars; [not hearted or author-hearted]
Message Edited by gocubsgo2 on 01-16-2010 05:28 PM
Thank you, I just completely fixed half the level, all the visible dark matter and dissolve material were removed, I removed every single MM object, leading to a cooler "battle"(I haven't put in any attacks yet) against a fiery black hole. The "point room" was completely deleted, allowing me to put a sub-wheel inside the wheel. The Collecter's voice was sent into the omniscent "spirit" of the dark dimension.
The glass was meant for exactly that purpouse ,to infuriate, so I left that as is.
As you see by the name, it was meant to be completely random.
The grammatical errors were to some extent fixed, but I remain tied to the 5-7-5 sylablle haiku form.
As I said before, thank you, the level is much better now. I don't want another review, but if you have the chance, could you look at the update to see if I'm on the right track?
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